comments on short stories

Part 1:
Carrie- Your cool girl seems to be well liked in the class. She has a charismatic personality and when she speaks everyone listens because she has something smart to say and even the teacher thinks that shes cool.

Maggie- I agree with Sandy, your very descriptive when explaining your cool person. Does this come from anything? Do you wish that you were like this or is this all what you see everyone thinks of as cool? You show she has confidence and that she is not that afraid of what people think of her. I like your ending, its intriguing how she leaves the way she enters and that no one really knows anything abut her

Rachel- I see that your girl is all about outer beauty where she wears the right stuff and has a pretty face and style. She is also in a way isolated/ indifferent since you explain her as not giving anything about her self. This is different then Carrie's story where her cool person had a social personality and that made her cool.

YuXi- I like your cool character. Its so different from all the other stories I have read. Your character is more laid back and you can easily see where it fits into your own character. I love that she is into art, that to me is really cool and even more that she is nervous about showing her art. I also agree with Jia min that in it there is also the possibility of having two cool characters.

Henry- I liked how you started off your story. It gave a really good image into what you wanted the reader to see. I also like how the cool person was not cool the first moment she walked in because its usually not like that. Its the slow build up and how she was smart.

Part 2:
I noticed that in the majority of the stories the cool person had the cool clothes (great style) and has a certain way about them where the person is well liked. Although there were stories where the cool person was not seen as cool to everyone at first but instead was just cool to the people around them, their friends. But it is interesting that so many people where they have different definitions of cool and yet there are some interlocking parts. But Yu-xi's story stands out much compared to the others. I totally agree with her opinion. Although it is interesting to see who her cool person was, the girl who painted the mural or the boy who helped her out. But both were different. They were cool because they helped other people, where the others different because they did not help anyone and even though they were social they pretty much stuck to themselves.